I received some really helpful feedback on my latest story (DLY, chapter 1: Our Father) and have taken it into account, giving it a bit of a rewrite. (I just edited the submission, refresh it if you don't see the difference.) Nothing too incredibly major--it's not like anyone who has already read it now has to read it again because the plot is totally different now or anything. I just tried to address some of the literary stuff I had been told--the show vs. tell issue, the way I handled Girard's emotional state, etc. Hopefully it's a better now! I'm still very excited about this series, and now that I'm done with chapter one (again,) hopefully I can get some decent work on chapter two done before too long.

Also, the title of this journal was taken from Ghost Opera: The Second Coming. Because, you know, updated rerelease and all that.

Also, I appear to have accidentally spammed the thing into all sorts of groups while I was at it.  If you are affected by this (like you'r...